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原创：五言绝句

2015-10-28 08:40:18| 分类：古体诗词 | 标签： |举报 |字号大中小订阅

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昨天有网友写一首五言律诗，读起来秋意凄然，其中原文是这样的：

秋风

时到秋萧瑟，愁怀意黯然。

飞尘浮白水，落叶舞蓝天。

乱竹横乡路，残花倒雨田。

飘零孤影伫，郁郁度残年。

感觉有些悲凉，未经同意小改了后四句：

俏竹横乡路，余花卧雨田。

飘飘清影伫，郁郁下青山。

成了绝句，有高手朋友，也可以来接着改，见笑了。

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